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I just received an official urgent announcement regarding to project A5401 from my management team. Please refer to the followings for further detailed announcements and feel free to contact me if any inquiry or negoication is requested by your side.
1)After careful consideration, our management team decide to adjust the unit price of item A3021 from 50 dollars to 60dollars due to the rise in cost of raw material. Please let me know if this new price is acceptable. The new price is almost 1.2 times of the old price.
2)After having the urgent meeting with our production manager, please allow us another two weeks to finish the order PO098721 since our production line is extremely busy now. And we guarantee that we will have this shipment shipped by the end of this month. Sorry for any inconvenience we may cause.
3)Regarding to your request from your previous e-mail, we have asked the warehouse guys to replace the wrong manuals with the most revised manuals and make sure every manual is placed into the right box correspondingly.
Again, thanks for your time in this matter. Please kindly give me a call or contact me at my e-mail at your convenience if your have any inquiry regarding to above changes.
Sincerely
Answer:
Dear Clients: (use a format and insert individual names)
I just received an official urgent announcement from my managment team regarding project A5401. Please find the details below and feel free to contact me with any questions or concerns.
1) We have adjusted the unit price of item A3021 from 50 dollars to 60 dollars, due to the rise in cost of raw material. Please confirm that you are aware of the new rate.
2) Regrettably, order PO098721 is running two weeks later than our expected completion date, but we can guarantee that we will have this shipment shipped by the end of this month. I apologize for any inconvenience.
3)Regarding to your e-mail request, we have taken every measure to assure that current manuals are available and in their appropriate places.
I appreciate your time and consideration. Please rsvp via phone or email so that I can address any concens you may have regarding these items.
Sincerely
Send it just as you wrote it.
Perhaps letters like this will serve as a wake-up call to American companies to stop outsourcing.
Change it to
I just received an official urgent announcement regarding project A5401 from my management team. Please refer to the following for further detailed announcements and feel free to contact me if you have an enquiry or any negotiation is requested by your side.
1)After careful consideration, our management team have decided to adjust the unit price of item A3021 from 50 dollars to 60 dollars due to the rise in cost of raw materials. Please let me know if this new price is acceptable. The new price is almost 1.2 times the old price.
2)After having an urgent meeting with our production manager, please allow us another two weeks to finish the order PO098721 since our production line is extremely busy right now. We guarantee we will have this order shipped by the end of this month. Sorry for any inconvenience this may cause.
3)Regarding to the request from your previous e-mail, we have asked the warehouse guys to replace the wrong manuals with the most revised manuals and make sure every manual is placed into the right box correspondingly.
Again, thanks for your time in this matter. Please give me a call or contact me on my e-mail at your convenience if your have any questions regarding the above changes.
Sincerely
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