Wat do u think of this poem?
Question:
Who will I talk to?
When I can’t feel the beauty at all
When the pain inside is blocking my mind
When my heart tells me something isn’t right
I speak to the moon but he doesn’t answer
His smile shows somewhere else lie the answer
Maybe I’ll go and talk to a friend who doesn’t care
Or search for a true love that will never be there
Maybe I’ll find a grieve in a tear
Washing away all my fears
Or go and listen to a good song
Before I get foolish and do something wrong
I manage to talk to a dark screen
Where every good and bad thing can be seen
Where people of every kind are there
Chatting about stupid things that I couldn’t bear
No one has the same interest
I wanted to have a chat to know I still exist
I left the stupid screen with pain and sorrow
And went to write something for tomorrow
Since no one seems to care
And they forget in one life we share
The pen seems to be the only thing
That speaks and talks to me
Through my words I know I’m here
And the moon smiles again
Answer:
Excellent written with feeling, caring, sadness, & hope.
It has some originality to it, which I respect. It's not bad, all in all. :)
Dear Ms. Literature, I think this poem was confusing. Good luck.
It's good, I can see what your frined is trying to do with this poem, but you have to remember, not all poems have to rhyme. It a little odd at times when you read it, but it is still good.
good poem about answers, the screen of gems!
its awee bit sad
I feel its raw with emotions and the beauty is in
the eye of the beholder.
Obviously heartfelt, but needs work.
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